Friday, 25 September 2015
Tuesday, 15 September 2015
WALT: write and interesting and detailed recount.
Hooray it is was market day! Selling products, Buying products and enjoying products.People excitingly waiting in line to withdraw money in order to buy products. Everyone rushing as they set up workshops for the products they have made.
Market day! All term we have been working hard on products to sell. There are five different groups where students have been put into, Custom Stationery, Kitchen, Jewels and accessories, Toys and Home ware. I was put in Toys. I make fun toys for students to play with. Every week we get a chance to go to our enterprise groups and make our products to sell on this big market day.
Before all the buying selling we had to set up our stalls. As setting up my station there was a row of desks not just for my station it was for others as well. i only took two desks. I hanged a poster on it advertising my products so students can come and buy it. I had a partner with me helping me set up the station. Once we finished setting up our station we waited for our teachers instructions.
I had a chance to swap with my partner which means she is selling the products while i get to go shop around students stations. In the bay area was the Kitchen group. Students were selling ice blocks, cakes hot chips and brownies. it was feeling pretty hot for me so i decided i’d buy me and watermelon flavoured ice-block. It was so delicious.
What an awesome experience I had that Friday. I enjoyed a lot of things. But there was one thing I wasn't really happy of. I didn't really finish making students orders. Other than that I really enjoyed it.
Write for my reader
I've tried to think about my reader
My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.
My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.
My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
I tried to meet the purpose
My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose
The message is clear in some parts of the recount.
My text fully meets the purpose.
The message is clear all through the recount.
My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.
My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.
My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.
My introduction wows my reader!
My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.
I have tried to follow my plan.
Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.
My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea.
I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.
My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.